What do you think of this poem?

Hey there. Good job on the character sketch. Analyzing a somewhat unusual character is a good approach for a poem, and you pulled it off with a sharp perception here. I think your poem could be better if, instead of stating your point directly--e.g., "The teacher nods with a sympathetic look / It seems as he's about to cry"--you think of a way to show his emotions with what he's doing. If the poem is about a teacher you've known who reached a point in his life where he was unhappy, what kinds of things would he do in his daily life that would show that side of his character? Also, to make a poem more dramatic and stirring, use metaphors and similes to underline your meaning. When you start writing the poem, start painting a picture of a scene or an image that conveys what you're trying to say about this character without coming out and saying it directly.